My First Review

I got my first review on Book Country today, and it hurt alot. It was as fallows:

Kristen
Peer Review
06/11/2011

Overall Feedback
First of all, you've uploaded too much. Just do a few at a
time. I'm only going to read 3 chapters and base my reviews
on it. You do need to proofread for spelling errors
(crowd, minute) and weed out passive words and -ly words.
You're missing tags for dialogue too. Long senences. Your
chapters are too short--don't title them Use single quotes
for inside dialogue, doubles for outside. I think you need
to proofread this.
As for paranormal romance, it has paranormal elements in it.
 Unless the romance comes in later, I don't see it. Plus the
title isn't catchy enough for PNR. But you have an ideal
concept.

Character Development
You need a bit more backstory and description on Brock. You
 have very little. Tell us how they became vampires. I suggest
 you read other PNR authors like Keri Arthur and Lara Adrian.

Pacing
Due to short chapters, it's going very fast. Slow it down a
little. Add backstory, description, action. This need a lot
of work!

First of all I will be professional and not resort to name calling, and so you know this review was by a everyday person like you or I. Now the first problem I have with this is that if you want to learn more about a character then you will have to read more than three chapters. Hence, why I uploaded so much. Second is no person is just going to jump into bed with someone so of course the first few chapters don't have alot of romance. You have to get to know the characters first, and, for the record, A Vampire's Demons is a great title. I also own every Keri Arthur book and some Lara Adrian so *childishly sticks my tongue out*. Next, the book's chapters are small due to the different views I give for the same situation. You don't just hear her side of the story, but enjoy both interpretations of an event. Then finally, the story moves so fast for a reason, and that is because there is so much story to tell. Getting into a relationship isn't a easy thing so why on earth would it be so in a romance novel? Answer: It's not. So that is my feelings toward my first review.